Radio advert - Recordings

This is my 1st recording of my ad. I thought it went well for the first attempt however the tone of my viouce didnt sound very good. It wouldnt make me want to buy it.

I think the tone of my vooice is alot better in this one, it sounds more natural however i dont like the 'get out' bit it sounds aggressive so i think im going to change the script a bit.

This one isn't the way i wanted the tone isn't good and you can tell its being read from a script. However the change in the script sounds so much better at the end compared to the previous ones.